Tina Smith – Deleted Scenes

Tina Smith – Deleted Scenes

Today we’re welcoming Tina Smith, an indie author who writes a paranormal romantic Wolf Siren Series. Tina shares a bit about how her editing process works.

Here’s Tina!

I am the Australian author of four books in the Wolf Sirens Series. Most of what I write is used in the final product. It does get refined and added to, but I don’t usually change things dramatically. I start out simple and my work swells as I go back and add more description and detail, improve dialogue. I am in charge, being an indie I rarely ditch whole scenes or change tense and things like that. I am a pantser and I like to use stream of conscious writing techniques or I don’t get much done, being a busy person. I tend to write in American and then we have to tweak it back to English spelling and grammar – this is a result of reading lots of American books and watching more American T.V than Australian. As a result all other stories I write I will edit in American English (including the short story anthology I will be publishing in later 2014). Americans are by far the biggest readers of my books.

My editor gets me to tweak or rethink certain word use and by the time I got to doing my 4th book, while taking final exams, I had a few issues with head hoping (which changes the point of view) I hadn’t previously had the issue, so I blame my hectic schedule. The largest chunk that I haven’t included would have to be the below scene/explanation and also a few paragraphs of a conversation between Aylish and Sam (the antagonist) in book 4. The reason being there was no point in including the extra dialogue. Another scene that was almost dropped was the scene in book #3 where we meet the mountain pack, my editor said that if the scene wasn’t useful for three or so reasons then it wasn’t necessary to the story. I loved the scene and wanted to use the ancient mountain pack in other books so I tweaked it and used it. I included Tisanes father in it, he was one of the wolves.  All I really did was give him a sentence at the end which made it more ominous (“We will have to teach them a lesson then.” – or something to that effect).  I like to end chapters with a bit of intrigue.

This is a little teaser about what really happened before Lila killed the lone wolf in Fever (WS2). It was not included book #3 but helped me to sort out what happened so that I could gauge the scope of repercussions when the wolf is killed and understand Cresida’s actions better in book 2, because Lila (the MC) doesn’t understand yet what is going on and the book is in her first person past tense point of view. I also use use third person past tense when showing other characters points of view. I have been known to throw in an omniscient point of view paragraph at the end of a chapter as well.

In book #2 Fever Lila is being entertained by Cresida who is a half breed, a hunter who is turned (she is a huntress and a wolf). Lila is supposed to kill Cres according to the legend, because she is the next huntress. Cres trains Lila in the mean time to take her place. But she won’t let Lila leave the Valley and when Lila gets more and more frustrated Cres finally takes her on a hunt to keep her occupied. They hunt a stray lone wolf, for much of the hunt Lila doesn’t know what they are doing and then suddenly she is in the thick of it fighting him. The identity of the wolf is claimed to be unknown but later Lila questions Cres and learns that he was an alleged paedophile. Cres and Reid turned him deliberately, this is how:

Past Present & Future

Reid and Cres planned it. They had been looking for somebody to turn with a needle but no one fitted the criteria. Cres refused anyone who had a close family no matter what they’d done, this discounted most of the criminals in Shade and there weren’t many in the first place but the second she read the paper she felt he was the one, the timing was right and he had a bad history, no close family of his own and not even the police would look too hard into the disappearance of a child molester.
Lovett lived in a caravan in his friend’s mother’s back yard. He had no close siblings, his father was dead and he had no girlfriend or children – well not since he had been accused of getting a bit too familiar with his de-facto partner’s daughter. He had a bad reputation and a previous drugs possession conviction and a drunk and disorderly. Mr. Lovett saw it however that he had just had a run of bad luck. Reid volunteered to do it. They had done the vial of Reid’s blood weeks earlier, after Cres realized hers might not do it. Besides that, it would be interesting to see if the blood injected was enough to infect him or whether it had to be a bite that passed on the curse.
Cres was busy with Lila anyway so she gave Reid the hypodermic needle, the identified victim was a regular at the local Corbago pub, a small town in the valley higher up in the hills above Shade and west of Tarah.
All Reid had to do was follow him home along the deserted footpath, in the darkness, walk up behind him and inject it into his thigh. Reid aimed more for the groin and plunged the blood in, and he didn’t stop moving past, so that he seemed to disappear into the darkness. He climbed the tree near Lovett’s caravan and watched and waited. Wolves didn’t generally climb; he crouched in the tree listening for the sounds that he was infected. He was there to stop anything that would drawer attention, to keep the old lady safe and even his friend – the jerk who helped him stay there.
The first night nothing happened. The man rose from his caravan late in the morning for a piss on the barbwire fence and Reid watched holding his breath. After the second day it was obvious the blood hadn’t done much. A heated argument with Cres confirmed Reid would have to get his teeth dirty. He did it quickly so that the drunkard hardly knew what had left the blood mark on his walk home from the pub. By the third night, after not leaving the van all day he tore up the insides while Reid held the door closed, while Lovett smashed out the small windows. In the morning he rose looking dazed and Reid caught up with him at a local café getting coffee, he stood behind him and whispered “I know what’s happening to you, here.” And he gave him a letter. The paper read “you have been infected, you are a werewolf there is no cure. To survive you must run into the state forest and live there as a wolf until you hear from me again. Trust me; we will try to help you.”
To the guy’s credit he eventually worked out what he was and within a few weeks he was hiding out in the wilderness, deeper in the national forest than they had expected. He was perhaps worried about a man hunt, but no one came except two girls and then he got his come-up-pence.

 

TinastwitterpictureAbout Tina: My name is Tina Smith. I am the author of Wolf Sirens. I inspire, entertain and examine life. I write paranormal, romantic and suspense fuelled tales about cursed wolves. Night is the time my creative juices flow and love exploring the lives of my protagonist’s within the paranormal genre under the light of the moon. I am driven to write and connect with readers through my mad-capped imagination — you could say it’s a calling… My books are similar to Maggie Stiefvater’s Wolves of Mercy Falls Trilogy.

 

Wolf Sirens Thumbnail (2)Wolf Sirens #1: Forbidden: Discover the Legend:

The Mystical Bond, the Fatal Allure … of Hunter & Prey

Misunderstood seventeen year old Lila Crain unwillingly moves to the foreboding town of Shade, prepared to face her punishment – Shade High. But she can’t begin to anticipate the life-altering events that lie in wait for her.

The dark and charismatic Reid has a wolfish grin and amber eyes that would make any girl blush and he has his sights set on the new girl in school. Reid’s stunning friends – including icy top dog Sam – invite Lila into their clique. Suspicious, yet flattered by their attention, she lets down her guard and answers the intriguing call like a moth to a flame.

Thrillingly introduced to the local nightlife by the enigmatic group, Lila finally feels like she belongs. But her newly found friendships threaten to turn sour when she unwittingly develops feelings for the leader’s off-limits boyfriend, Sky. Tensions rise further when a quirky local named Cresida warns Lila to stay away from the clique at all costs. Undeterred, she is irresistibly drawn to uncover the truth behind their mysterious lifestyle. Lila unwittingly starts off a chain of events that will forever alter fate for both hunter and hunted as she learns they have been waiting for her…

Inspired by the legend of the femme fatale goddess, Artemis, Wolf Sirens is a compelling gothic masterpiece of paranormal romance.

Forbidden, Fever, Night Fall and the soon to be released Dusk in Shade – all continue the tale of Lila Crain, the heroine with the chip on her shoulder, on an epic paranormal journey in which forbidden love threatens to destroy the underworld.

“If you want a book with mythology, mystery, heartache, romance, and wolves, then check this series out.” 4 Stars – Ryan caughtinasnyderwebb.blogspot

Find the rest of Tina Smith’s Wolf Siren’s series here: Amazon Author Page: http://www.amazon.com/Tina-Smith/e/B008V3H97A

 

Author Links:

Goodreads; http://www.goodreads.com/TinaSmith Kindle: Forbidden; http://www.amazon.com/dp/B009GG06AS Wolf Sirens Fever; http://www.amazon.com/Wolf-Sirens-Fev… Night Fall: http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/B00D6BUDH0

Facebook; http://www.facebook.com/wolfsirens

Smashwords: Forbidden; https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/210115 Fever: https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/248222 Night Fall: https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/321480

Twitter: https://twitter.com/tinawolfsirens

Pinterest: http://www.pinterest.com/wolfsirens/boards/

 

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Stay tuned for more Deleted Scenes editing tips next Friday, March 28th with Vicki So

March 28th – Vicki So

April 4th – Ella Quinn

April 11th – Deborah O’Neill Cordes

April 18th – Elaine Calloway

April 25th – Jana Richards

1 Comment

  1. I am also the queen of run on sentences. :)

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